新手编剧常犯的 10 个错误（以及如何修正）
新手编剧最常犯的十个错误，每一个都附有具体的修正方法。把这份清单放在手边，每一稿在发给任何人之前都对照检查一遍。
在这一课中你将学到
- 你的剧本真正应该从哪里开始
- 如何把说出来的感受换成动作和潜台词
- 为什么有名字的角色太多，会伤害观众，也会拖累制作
- 如何用大纲和故事元素，发现没有变化的场景和不统一的名字
- 如何拆开大段的动作描述，以及为什么要把摄影机指示留给分镜
- 为什么括号提示、缺失的中点和无休止的打磨会毁掉一份草稿
每个新编剧都会犯同样的错误，这其实是好消息：一旦知道了，它们就很容易被发现。这一课逐一讲解最常见的十个新手剧本写作错误，以及如何在 ScreenWeaver 中修正每一个。
你会学到尽可能晚地开始故事，把说出来的感受换成动作和潜台词，合并次要角色，删掉或改写没有任何变化的场景。名字不统一会产生重复的故事元素，大段堆砌的动作描述要拆成简短的画面段落，摄影机指示则属于分镜。然后是到处都是的括号提示、因为没有中点而塌下去的第二幕，以及最大的一个错误：永远写不完。把这份清单放在手边，每一稿都对照检查。这是免费剧本写作课程的第 6.2 课。
完整文字稿
英语旁白的文字稿。
0:04Every new screenwriter makes the same mistakes. That's good news. They're easy to spot once you know them. Here are the 10 I see most often and how to fix each one in Screenweaver.
0:16Mistake 1. Starting too early. The first page shows a character waking up, making coffee, driving to work. Start as late as possible. At the moment, something is already wrong. The night fairy starts at two minutes past midnight, not at dinner.
0:34Mistake 2. Characters who explain their feelings. I'm so angry at you. Replace every stated feeling with an action or with a line that has subtext.
0:46Mistake 3. Too many characters. Every named character is someone the audience must remember, and later, someone you must design. Merge minor characters or leave them unnamed.
0:59Mistake 4. Scenes without change. If a scene ends exactly where it began, cut it or rewrite it until something shifts. Check it on the outline. Every scene should sit under a beat.
1:14Mistake 5. Inconsistent names. The jetty, then the doc. Maya, then the girl. In Screenweaver, that means duplicate story elements. Use the suggestions while you type, and check your story elements regularly.
1:30Mistake 6. Walls of action. Paragraphs of 8 or 10 lines. Break them into images. One paragraph each. Three or four lines at most.
1:41Mistake 7. Directing the camera. Close up on. We pan to. Angle on. Leave it to the storyboard. Write what we see, and the shots will follow.
1:54Mistake 8. Parentheticals everywhere. If every line has an emotion in brackets, none of them counts. Keep them for the rare line that would be misread without one.
2:06Mistake 9. No midpoint. The second act sags because nothing changes in the middle. Look at your outline. If there's no midpoint label, find the twist. The false victory or the false defeat that turns the story.
2:21And Mistake 10. Never finishing. Polishing the first ten pages forever. Get to the end, then rewrite. A finished draft can be fixed. An unfinished one can't.
2:34Keep this list next to you, and run it on every draft. Next, the table read of The Night Ferry.